Explaining My Thinking
Down below is a revised copy of my writing that changes the point of view in the text. I changed The Tell-Tale Heart from a 1st person POV to the second person. I wanted to turn readers into active characters where it might interact with the protagonist. I wanted to see if it fits well with this section or not and it really fits well and organized. Really want to let the readers feel to be inside the story and take an action to better understand the story. I chose to use the second person because there are a lot of other characters or imaginary characters that can be pretended to get a better and different view. And to get a closer look, also to bring you, the reader more locked into the short story.
Rewrite for Second Person POV
“Looking into his eyes, I see him smiling, with no fear. He welcomes us in and bade us well with manner. We asked, someone, have heard a shriek and reported to check. He denied, ‘the shriek, was one of my dreams.’ Then he added on, ‘the old man, I said, was absent in the country.’ He took us all to his house to search, impatiently, he said, ‘Search well.’ With a rushing and guilty temper. He led us, after a while, to the old man’s chamber. He showed us the treasure, secure, undisturbed.” Enthusiastically, he brought chairs into the room and desired us to rest here from their fatigue. While we see himself, in the wild audacity of a perfect triumph, he placed over the seat upon the very spot beneath which reposed the corpse of the victim that we never discovered. Instead, we were satisfied by his manners. But it felt like he was at singularly at ease. We all sat, and while he answered cheerily, we have gone off-topic to familiar things. But, ere long, we see him sweating more and too pale. His head started to ache, so he scratched, and he covered his ears to get rid of the fancied ringing. But we didn’t bother, so our chatter continued.