I was more generous than Mr. Dalton when it came to grading. I think there were differences because, though I identified most of the issues I had in my IO, I didn’t identify its severity. By practicing more, making it more fluent, and having a better delivery, it can greatly impact my grade. The other change I can make is to have a better analysis. I was looking at mostly the description of the passage. I could have talked more about the author’s choices and focused more on the global issue.
Criterion A: 6
Even though I summarized my first text, Grendel, and most of my quotes were relevant to my global issue, I did not summarize my second text, the Outing in the Mountains, and I didn’t provide enough evidence to show that I had good knowledge and understanding about the two texts. When listening back to the recording, I realized that I did not mention my two texts in the first question.
Criterion B: 6
There is analysis in my IO, but most of it was very literal and mainly full of description. The analysis and evaluation were relevant, but I did not talk a lot about the author’s choices. I also talked too slowly, so I missed a few points that I intended to talk about.
Criterion C: 8
I thought my oral was mostly focused on the task, and specifically my global issue. I thought the balance between the texts was balanced. However, I thought I talked about Grendel a bit more because I rushed a bit at the end. I thought my ideas were mostly cohesive. The IO definitely had a clear structure.
Criterion D: 7
I thought my language was quite clear and did not have many errors, none of which hindered communication. I did pause a lot, though, causing me to lose a lot of time that could have been used to explain more content. One of the most lacking parts of this IO is the style. It was mainly in a monotonic voice.
What I Did Well and What I Need to Improve On
In terms of content and analysis, I thought it was a great start, however, it was hindered because I talked too slowly, and there were too many points in the IO where I stopped talking for a moment to gather my thoughts. I thought the biggest way I can improve on for this IO is just practice beforehand. I believe my stuttering and going too slow was the cause of the lack of practice.
After reading the Guardian article by Olivia Burkeman, many aspects of Murakami’s novel, Norwegian Wood, became clear as there were many similarities in themes and issues. I believe both texts explore general themes of communication and politics.
Throughout Norwegian Wood, communication has been a large factor in Toru’s life. Toru struggles with his relationship with Naoko. It was established that “Naoko never loved” Toru, even though Toru loves her dearly. This was caused by a lack of communication between the two. Even though they saw each other lot, Toru doesn’t “remember talking to [her] much” (Murakami 27). This connects to how Toru is always passive and is never willing to face problems head-on. It reflects Murakami’s view on his own fame. Murakami is uncomfortable with his fame and would much rather be a “curious if slightly bemused spectator” (Burkeman). How Murakami writes his books is also representative of Toru’s lack of motivation. Murakami describes how he got the idea of fish for his book Kafka on the Shore as just something he thought of, with no underlying meaning behind it. It is almost as if Murakami’s actions have no motive behind it and that he just did it because he felt like it.
In these two pages of the graphic novel, Persepolis, Marjane Satrapi uses various techniques to display Marji’s determination. The panels in the pages show Marji and Mehri participating in a demonstration during the Islamic revolution. Since the start of the revolution, Marji has wanted to demonstrate, as seen when her mom says, “For once she didn’t insist on coming with us” (Marjane 38). Marji’s determination to demonstrate is further evident by the clothing that Marji and Mehri are wearing in the first three panels of page 38. Marji is wearing a striped sweater, resembling an inmate’s uniform, whereas Mehri is wearing a checkered dress. The resemblance of an inmate’s uniform foreshadows Marji’s disobedience. White symbolizing truth and black symbolizing deceit, the mixture of white and black symbolizes Marji’s deceit, appearing to be truthful but is in reality infected by deceit. Marji’s disobedience and deceit represent the extent she is willing to go through to obtain what she desires. In the third panel on page 38, Marji’s mother’s mention of “chicken” furthermore displays Marji’s determination. Before chickens were kept for food, the only purpose of breeding them was for cockfighting. This suggests that since Marji’s beginnings, she was there to fight and nothing else. Satrapi may use this idea to show that she is determined to tell people of her life story.
When comparing this attempt to the first IO performance I felt that I had a better understanding of what to do, even so, there is still a lot of aspects that can be improved upon. When I look at what went well I thought my introduction and my summary of the works were quite good in that they were descriptive despite them being too long. My greatest surprise when reflecting back on this performance was that “Queen Herod” was less analytical than “Green Rice”. Because we looked at “Queen Herod” as a class right before I started planning the IO I thought I would have a greater and fresher understanding of the poem, compared to “Mother’s Story,” a poem I haven’t read in months. The largest thing I think I can improve on is my analysis of the works, most of the time they are too descriptive and not analytical. Compared to the previous performance this performance was more analytical but there was still a lot of descriptive analysis. During this performance, my “Green Rice” analysis was more analytical however my “Mother’s Story” was more descriptive in nature.
Throughout the first chapter in “Oranges Are Not the Only Fruit,” Jeanette Winterson uses a lot of techniques to convey her messages. The first thing to notice is the chapter title, which is the same as the first book in the old testament, Genesis. In the biblical book Genesis, it describes the beginning of the world and people, in the chapter it describes Jeanette’s origins and her family. There are also other religious references throughout the chapter and the rest of the book. For example, Jeanette’s mother can be paralleled with the Virgin Mary because of both acquired children without having sex. Jeanette added these references because Jeanette’s life has been profoundly affected by Christianity, ever since her adoption.
In the chapter, Winterson also foreshadows Jeanette’s future lesbianism. The gypsy’s prediction ends up becoming real, and it is implied that the two women are lesbians. The way Jeanette’s mother is hostile towards them is similar to the hostility Jeanette’s mother will show to Jeanette later in the book. Jeanette also compares herself to one of the two women. By foreshadowing, Winterson can build suspense for what is to come.
Peoples perspective of women is often misjudged,
This article talks of concern about how adds perceive women has not changed in 6 decades. They are seen as the one in the family that will always stay at home and protect the children. Both the Worlds Wife and Green Rice talk about the issues of women. In the World’s Wife, Duffy uses a notable woman in history and alters their story changing what people would typically perceive them to be. In Green Rice Lam, in many instances, references to double meanings, for example, in “the Perfume River,” the perfume river can also be seen as the all-female squadron.
Motherhood is not something to be taken so lightly.
In this article, it talks about how a mother is the most important person in someone’s life and that they should be considered heroes. The Worlds Wife and Green Rice express a lot about motherhood in the poems. In the World’s Wife, poems such as “Queen Herod” and “Demeter” are influenced heavily by Duffy’s experience as a mother and her effect on her child. In Green Rice, poems such as “A Mother Story” and “Childhood Story” commentate on the influence a mother has on children.
Carol Ann Duffy’s poem collection, “The Worlds Wife,” has many themes, literary techniques, and global issues that are present in varying poems throughout the collection. I have chosen three poems that are linked through the global issue of men being foolish and unintelligent. These three poems are Pilate’s wife, Mrs. Darwin, and Mrs. Icarus.
Mrs. Darwin and Mrs. Icarus are very similar in that they are performance or insult poems that are intended to be funny when spoken out loud. In Mrs. Darwin, the persona compares Charles Darwin with a chimpanzee, an ironic joke because of Charles Darwin’s formulation of the theory of evolution. The persona also never says the name Charles Darwin, however, it can be assumed so. It can also be that from the voice of Duffy that she is saying that all men are like chimpanzees. In Mrs. Icarus, the persona expresses how she thinks her husband is a “Grade A pillock.” If the poem was spoken from Duffy’s perspective, the poem would show how Duffy often sees husbands, or just men in general, reach for a goal unreachable just to end up falling to the ground. The poem Delilah is different in the two that it is a lot longer, but Delilah also makes a fool of men. The story of Samson and Delilah is that Samson loved Delilah, but Delilah was bribed to find out the source of Samson’s great strength to bring him down. Delilah would succeed in finding out that his hair was the source of his power and then cutting his hair, this would then lead to Samson’s downfall. In the poem Delilah, the persona states that “[Samson] can rip out the roar / from the throat of a tiger, / or gargle with fire… / all for a dare,” implying that Samson is willing to do something crazy and life-threatening just for something as insignificant as a dare.
After reading the article “The Public and the Private,” by Marian Cox and Robert Swan, I had noted three of the most essential things about Carol Ann Duffy’s poetry. These are the ambiguity of perspective, “man and wife,” and the mythical origins of the personas.
In Duffy’s poetry, I believe that one of the most essential aspects is the variety of voices, especially in “The Worlds Wife.” The whole collection was intended to spread the voices of women. By implementing her own perspectives in the body of another woman, she can present two female views. Not only that, but it also provides a lot more meaning and depths to her writing. In “The Public and the Private,” “man and wife” describes how Duffy uses the characters of notable male counterparts as her persona’s. This is important because it once again shines the light on the perspective of women. Not only that, but the background information of a poem is just as important as the poem. Without knowing the place of origin for the character, a lot can be left unknown, which can be an option for a poet. However, “The Worlds Wife” was intended to spread a message about feminism, there will be no message if the poems are too ambiguous. What I believed the third most important aspect was the mythical origins of the personas. Like the “man and wife,” the mythical origins are fundamental to the poem. Duffy’s choice of personas is essential because, throughout history, either themselves or their counterparts have been presented to society with the perspective of a man. By changing these iconic characters, it is almost as if she is changing history, showing the world what these characters should really be like.
The poem “With the Perfume River” by Lam Thi My Da from the poem collection Green Rice explores the global issue of nature being a leading force in someone’s life and community. In “With the Perfume River,” the poem describes someone that is in distress, but the perfume river leads it to the horizon, to their future. The setting of the poem is the perfume river, which flows in Lam Thi My Da’s hometown hue. Through the usage of language and structure, Lam expresses how life and community are led by nature.
In the first stanza the Perfume River “gathers the sky’s soul but doesn’t know it” (3), if the sky is referring to people it would suggest that the river is gathering people and creating a community. In the night, it is common to see stars in the river and a star can be seen as the soul of the sky, so it means that “the silent stars” (4) are also referring to the people. However, stars are also a source of navigations, so the stars are “Lighting each other” (6) towards the right path. The third stanza describes the persona “Moving along the Perfume River/Moving with the Perfume River” (11-12) these two lines are the same with the difference of the words “along” (11) and “with” (12). “Moving along the perfume river” (11) refers to the river in hue. However, “moving with the perfume river” (12) refers to an all-female combat unit during the Vietnam war. This shows how, with the help of others around you, you can navigate your way through your life.
The structure is an irregular one, the stanzas range from 4 to 9 lines per stanza. There is also no rhyme scheme or syllable pattern. This irregularity reflects nature and its unpredictability. The lack of structure can also suggest the need for guidance. The need for guidance is shown in the poem with the usage of words such as “aimlessly” (14) and “lost” (19).
In the poem, Lam expresses the idea of the Perfume River, the stars, and the poem’s irregular structure, forming a community and guiding them through life.