I think Mr. Dalton’s feedback is more generous and accurate because I am sometimes indecisive about my grade when my performance matches the descriptions of two different mark bands. I thought I could get a higher mark for my language (Criterion D), but it turned out to be the lowest of the four criteria. I will be more aware of my tone during the presentation in my final IO by speaking at a slower pace and get more familiar with the points to prevent reading straight from my outline sheet. I will also use the exact words in the GI to guide me through my presentation with more evidence from the text, making sure that I do not go off from my GI and I always link what I am saying to the GI instead of staying at a shallow level of analysis. Also, I will make sure both of the texts are thoroughly analyzed, making the two halves of the presentation balanced. I will look back to the feedback of my practice IO when I prepare for my final IO to remember the things I have to fix. I can also rehearse the IO to my peers for feedback and ask them to see if any changes could be made before the final presentation.
The knowledge and understanding of the extracts are not sustained, while there are relevant references to the extracts and to the work.
I should make more mention of the authorial choices throughout the presentation. In my presentation, I only talked about authorial choices briefly at the end.
Because of the tone of the delivery, the second work sounds more interesting and easier to follow than the first work.
My tone in the first half of the presentation sounds a little boring as if I am reading my points off of the outline sheet.
What went well:
- The timing of my IO went well, and I have given balanced time to both of my extracts.
- I did not misunderstand the questions during the last five minutes, and I could make reference to the work when being asked by a question.
- I have given an overview of the summary of the works and how the works present the GI so that my presentation was not limited to the extracts
What can be improved:
- I have covered a wide range of quotations of my texts, but the analysis lacked breadth. Maybe I could try to mention fewer points and provide a more in-depth analysis for each point
- The tone can be improved. I should be more familiar with the points in the presentation to keep the bullet points on my outline sheet to a minimum
- Consider authorial choices throughout the IO
This poem is about the poet mentioning the lack of acceptance and audience that she receives during her lifetime and questioning the need for attention in one’s life. In the first stanza, Dickinson tells her readers that she is a “nobody,” who rarely gets social approval from the others, and shows her eagerness of having someone like her and be “a pair.” Where in the second stanza, Dickinson addresses her perspective that becoming preoccupied and satisfied by being admired is meaningless. The overall poem is for the poet to argue that without external acceptance and acknowledgment, one should also feel confident and comfortable.
The global issues presented in the poem include the embracing of one’s identity, personal values, isolation, and loneliness. According to Dickinson, she shows her passionate and joyful attitude in the poem by using exclamation marks when saying that she is “nobody,” revealing the fact that she is embracing her true identity even when the others do not. However, she is still yearning for someone who shares similar values with her, because she feels lonely when not being able to be in a “pair” or having a sense of belonging when the others isolate her.
The poem has a structure of two quatrains and the second stanza has a rhyme scheme of “abcb.” These structural characteristics are typically seen in Dickinson’s other poems. The mood of this poem is enthusiastic, as the poet is confident with her own identity and the way of interacting with people, making her argument of living without other’s judgment even more convincing. One major literary device she uses is a simile. In the second stanza, she is referring to those that have the tendency to make noise for the sake of other people’s attention as frogs that make loud sounds and croaks. By using this simile, Dickinson emphasizes her opinion that living according to social standards by acting and intentionally grabbing other’s attention is useless. One interesting point that I have found when doing research for this poem is that in some versions of this particular poem, the “n” in the first “nobody” of the poem is capitalized. By making this word a proper noun, Dickinson is giving “nobody” an identity, which confirms her idea that all sorts of identities in the society are valid and equal. Even someone who is not widely accepted should also be given no judgment.
In these two pages (24-25), the narrator Marjane portrays her childish perception of the revolution through her interaction with her family members, highlighting the harm of wars among political conflict. Before this stage of the plot, Marjane only knows the influence of revolution through adults’ demonstrations and the veil, but her mother is eventually telling her the actual costs that politics have done to Marjane’s family by recalling Marjane’s grandfather’s painful consequence. The narrative perspective switches to Marjane’s mother describing her childhood being in horror and having her father being taken by the police. Marjane’s mother’s childhood experience coincides with Marjane’s childhood, as neither of them has had the opportunity to enjoy their childhood during a peaceful time, emphasizing the detrimental effect turmoil has on the development of children and the future of the countries of these children.
By knowing the fact that Marjane’s family members could be directly harmed by the political turmoil, Marjane finally starts to adapt her childish way of understanding the world into a more mature way. As depicted in the second line of the page on the right, Marjane rejects her father’s invitation for playing the monopoly game. This game symbolizes the capitalistic deals happening in the world, and by refusing to play it, Marjane’s interest in the current turmoil shifts from a vague and romantic one into a realistic and comprehensive one.
In addition, at the end of the second page, which is also the end of the chapter, Marjane soaks herself into a bathtub in attempts to physically feel the torture that the government has done to her grandfather. Through this action, Marjane forces herself to take another step towards understanding the adult world and the terror that most adults are facing during this time. Furthermore, when Marjane is in the bathtub, God appears and asks her what she is doing. This religious use of God occurs early in the graphic novel whenever Marjane is confused or shock by the horrible situation in her surroundings. Therefore, at this stage, God symbolizes a guide that Marjane imagines in order to lead herself out of confusion, even though she eventually has to rely on herself in the scenario of solving internal conflicts and trying to understand the cruelty of the revolution.
The structure of the IO performance was clear for the examiner to follow. I provided signposts in the beginning, to link all my arguments together. I did well on the flow of each part of my analysis, including the introduction of the global issue, the summary of the works, events in the texts, detailed analysis as well as the conclusion that wraps everything up.
Having all criteria improved, my grade improved from a 3 to the highest 5 compared to the first IO practice. It took me quite a while this time in breaking the exemplar down to pay close attention to the structure and the way the exemplar brings out the analysis linking to the specific global issue. The “possible structure”document also helped me a lot with portioning my time for each section of my presentation.
The balance of my texts was a bit weak, since I really explored the global issue in Night Harvest in Green Rice, but Duffy’s Pope Joan still needed more focus on the connection between the texts and the global issue. I should also address the global issue in the transition part between my two texts to emphasize my focus of the presentation once again.
Jeanette Winterson uses her own first name as the name of the protagonist of this novel. The entire story is told from the protagonist’s perspective, talking to the reader with first-person narration. From the name of the narrator, the author is telling her reader that this character she shapes in the novel is a reflection of part of the author’s own life. This could be the religious background and the influence of religion on Winterson.
At the very beginning of the novel, Jeanette introduces her family through her seven-year-old eyes. The main character that she really puts emphasis on is her mother, a highly religious woman who devotes her life in the missionary works of her church. Jeanette describes her mother as someone without “mixed feelings (1),” meaning that in her mother’s opinion, things and people are either good friends or opposing enemies. This simple description of her mother foreshadows that when Jeanette becomes rebellious under the complete control of her religion and her mother’s command, her mother is possibly going to see Jeanette as an enemy.
Jeanette’s mother’s attitude towards sex is vividly shown in this chapter in many places. The first place is when Jeanette tells the reader that she is a special child who has been adopted by her mother due to her mother’s resistance towards begetting children through the action of sex. Later in the story, Jeanette’s mother stops Jeanette from buying comics from a lesbian couple, demonstrating her mother’s aversion to homosexuality. This particular incident also foreshadows Jeanette’s future of becoming a lesbian and being rejected by her mother due to her sexuality.
Winterson’s writing jumps around a lot through the narration of Jeanette. The story of the princess who is relieved after taking over the duties of the hunchback seems to have no connection with Jeanette’s personal story and her family, but the narration shifts into it anyways without any relevant linkages. However, if we look into the message that Winterson embeds into this abruptly inserted story, the story is actually a reflection of Jeanette’s early life under the religious background of her family life. The princess occupies her life with the duties to reduce the time she puts into feeling her pain, which reflects Jeanette’s admiration and conviction in her mother when she is young and does not see any other ways of living beside religion.
Jeanette Winterson divides the chapters of this novel according to the books of the Old Testament, linking to the religious theme of this novel. The first chapter is named Genesis, and it explains things that are portrayed in the Genesis book of the Old Testament. In Winterson’s novel, the narrator describes the origin, the beginning of her life with the descriptions of her family within this chapter, while the Genesis book explains the origin of God’s creation before anything else. It is because of God’s creation that people developed mankind and conflict, which is reflected in the novel that Jeanette’s strict and controlling mother serves as an origin of Jeanette’s future conflict with her mother and her religion.
Two possible global issues
- Empowerment of women
The article was written by the United Nations on the topic of gender equality, which is one of the sustainable development goals. The article talks about how women are treated unequally around the world domestically and socially. However, the article also mentions the progress of the global goal of raising women’s status by giving them equal rights and opportunities as men. In Lam’s ‘Green Rice,’ the poems introduce the war through the perspective of the poet, who is a woman experienced the Vietnam War. It could be clearly seen that the poet was strong as a female during the cruel time that the country has experienced. While the men were fighting on the battlefield, the women were also doing their roles that their society has offered them, allowing them to make their feminine contribution to the country. In Duffy’s ‘The World’s Wife,’ almost all female personas rebel against their silly husbands or male spouses who are unable to sense the unfairness that the women are experiencing. Thus, the collection links to the article by having the personas themselves fight against inequality and gain their rights and opportunities as female individuals. Duffy is a female poet that has won the poet laureate, an award rarely given to females. She sees a lot of inequality between the genders due to her personal sexuality, which provides her the insights to express her actions of the empowerment of women through her works. The difference between the article and the works is that the article explicitly addresses this global issue related to gender by stating facts and the improvement that the world has achieved, whereas the works implicitly allude the issue of females rebelling against gender inequality through the descriptions of more daily and casual scenarios. The difference could be caused due to the fact that SDGs were officially created in 2015, a year that the idea of gender equality was widely supported around the world, but the issue was not significantly recognized or realized during the periods that the two works were published. The lack of attention on the global issue restricted the poets from critically writing and addressing the issue in their poetry as an appeal for the empowerment of women.
- Individual’s transformation after loss
The article published in Psychology Today argues how individuals always have to go through a hard time after the illness or death of a family member or a divorce. There are stages that an individual has to overcome to recover from the sorrow, and once the individual finish undergoing the process, he or she would transform into someone who is more experienced and able to face more challenges. In Lam’s ‘Green Rice,’ Vietnamese learn from the war’s wretchedness. They grow as a community as each individual becomes braver due to the loss of their loved ones and the damage of the country. Lam herself contributes her own power by working and assisting the warfare of their country, which encouraged her to look positively towards the war and appreciate the ones sacrificed in the war. Lam has personally transformed into a stronger person that is able to teach her experience to other people and motivate them through her work. In ‘The World’s Wife’ by Duffy, female personas constantly fight back to what their dump and irrational husbands have done by doing things according to their own will. When they figure out that the marriage does not give them the opportunity to be loved forever or they have lost the original strong bonding with their male counterparts, they start to transform and work towards their personal goals according to their interests. The transformation after a female’s realization of her relationship with her husband could be significant because they usually transform to live better lives that fulfill themselves instead of completing tasks to meet the expectation of their husbands. The difference between the works and the article is quite significant in terms of their applications and purposes. The works are mainly addressed to express the poets’ insights or opinions of their experiences of transformation under their particular circumstances, whereas, in the article, the author is a psychologist who gives out advice for people who are undergoing a transformation due to the fact that there is the unbearable loss in their lives. This gap between the works and the article could be caused by different text types. The psychology website article is usually written to help people in their lives during this period of time when the internet is really popular, but the two works were written in the past when the internet was not like it is nowadays, making the works literatures for readers to enjoy instead of reading them for advice.
1) Text in translation: Night Harvest from Green Rice by Lam Thi My Da
2) English text: Pope Joan from The World’s Wife by Carol Ann Duffy
In the last few months of exploring Duffy’s interesting poetry collection The World’s Wife, I figured that the women are not always powerless when they want to fight back for their equality and justice. Even when they are at a so-called disadvantage given by society, they could still figure out ways to enlighten themselves without asking for the hypocritical and irrational desire advocated by the males. Thus, I was sure that this optimistic and ongoing trend of the empowerment of women could be an interesting global issue to explore, as I found it interesting when analyzing it in the work. I looked at how this global issue appears in the translated poetry collection, and the poem Night Harvest jumped into my mind since I found the women really brave in the poem when we were learning it. I used the poem Pope Joan from The World’s Wife as the text of the English work, because I was part of the group that analyzed this poem, and we figured the persona has a powerful will to find her own joy in life despite the extremely unequal opportunity given to females in her religious community. Lam addresses this global issue in-depth and vividly because she has personally experienced the movement of women portrayed in the poem during wartime, and the bravery of women in pursuing their value is significantly connecting to the global issue. Duffy is a feminist who is not afraid of being criticized for writing such sharp poetry collection, as men are constantly disdained in the work by the female personas. The empowerment of women must be crucial to Duffy that she could not hold herself back in enduring the inequality between the genders.
After reading Duffy’s interview with Barry Woods, my understanding of the messages that Duffy addresses in her poems becomes more focused. As I read the remaining poems, I constantly thought of the global issues that the poems are revealing as a way of Duffy expressing her own opinions and raising the awareness of her readers towards those issues. Since the collection The World’s Wife utilizes the perspectives of female characters, and from their perspectives, we could see different types of inner conflicts of women in relation to their husbands, as those cruelhearted men value other things over their relationships. Thus, I chose to explore the global issue of how selfishness and obsession within people towards their certain beliefs could destroy their romantic relationships. I selected three poems – Mrs Aesop, Mrs Sisyphus, and Mrs Faust – from the collection that all express this issue in common
Unlike other people who appreciate Aesop, Aesop’s wife finds Aesop’s fables cliché, because she thinks the actions of making up stories on animals and intentionally revealing moral messages through those fables are boring and ridiculous. The stubbornness of Aesop leads him to have a minimum time with his wife, which made Mrs. Aesop disappointed at her husband’s attitude towards their marriage over and over again. This problem occurs quite often in the real day world since many people are too obsessed with the matters that have brought them fame and success in their prior life, and soon after they realize how honored they could be while working on those matters, they would sacrifice their undivided attention and their precious time onto those tasks. Thus, these people are really likely to have not enough time for their marriage by constantly communicating and sharing ideas with their spouse, making the spouse disappointed or even angry. When this happens, their initial relationship would be ended, and all the results are due to the selfishness of a person, in this case, Aesop, at the beginning of their desire in gaining wider recognition outside the family. I found it really interesting how the way Duffy put a twist in the poem so that the readers would not look at fables with their opinion based on their previous experience and other people’s appreciation towards the fables. On the contrary, as a reader, I found Duffy’s work allowed me to look at a commonly seen great figure from a different perspective, enabling me to keep in mind that sometimes it is because of our point of view when we see something great, and maybe we are also just looking the bad sides of thing because of our point of view. Therefore, we should be aware of the familiar things that appear to be too normal for us and explore some of their hidden and fresh aspects through meticulous exploration.
Just like Aesop’s wife, Mrs. Sisyphus also views her husband as a person who is neverendingly working and leaving their relationship not engaged. Through the sarcastic and complaining voice of Mrs. Sisyphus’ diction, we could tell that she sees her husband pushing the stone all year long and not working on their marriage as an unacceptable situation. In fact, she does not view the stone as importantly as her relationship with her husband, but Sisyphus looks at it with a completely different opinion. Linking to the global issue, Sisyphus is too into his own affair of pushing the stone, which brought disadvantages to his relationship with his wife. It is true that sometimes, like Sisyphus, people do not have a lot of choices when they are given difficult and demanding tasks to do at either their workplaces or communities, but they really do have the opportunity to think over the values of those tasks in comparison to their family relationships. They could at least reconsider whether their job is worth it even it takes almost all the time away so they could not spend any time to build and improve their relationships with the loved ones.
Mrs. Faust expresses a similar idea connecting to the global issue, but she seems to be more accepting of the problem at the end instead of trying to resolve it by constantly complaining about her husband. According to the poem, Faust is dissatisfied with his successful life and always desire for more, which provides him barely any time to be with his wife. However, unlike the previous two poems, Mrs. Faust does not seem to be bothered by the fact that the relationship between her and her husband is just the unloving marriage. Mrs. Faust herself relies on the luxurious lifestyle that her husband gives her and becomes more and more careless about the emotional bond of their relationship. As her husband makes the devil’s pact, she goes on and lives her own materialistic life. In this case, both the wife and the husband are giving up on maintaining their relationship because of their greedy personal interest, tying in with the global issue I chose. This scenario happens in a lot of households as neither of the couple cares about their romantic relationship anymore, because all their care about is whether they could fulfill their outside desire that could be satisfied by their wealth.
I got a quite thorough understanding of the message that the poet suggests in the poem. This is shown in my annotation since I really spent some time in finding the hidden meaning before starting my paper. In my analysis, my argument of the demonstration of my interpretation is convincing to a large extent, as my teacher labeled in the rubric. The criterion that got the lowest grade is ‘focus and organization,’ in another word, the structure of my paper. I have to practice writing and building my central ideas in the introduction of my paper. In this paper 1 practice, although my thinking was coherent, I did not provide the main topics of my argument at the beginning using precise language, and my language in the introduction is sometimes redundant and not clear. Therefore, my use of language also needs attention in order to improve the overall quality of my paper. To solve this problem, I have to be aware when showing my interpretation of the writer’s message. I sometimes would write my thinking of the message of the writer in a definitive or forceful way instead of expressing it from a suggestive way (for example, using “shows” when I should use “suggests.”) Moreover, I need to give my analysis a flow that not only contains the claim and evidence but also includes a brief and convincing reasoning portion. My central target for the next piece of writing is the structure of my introduction paragraph. I will try to fulfill this goal by planning my main ideas into details before actually beginning to write my essay.
The article ’The Public and The Private’ introduces a series of aspects that readers should keep in mind when reading Carol Ann Duffy’s poetry collection ‘The World’s Wife.’ I have written an analysis piece for the last poem in the collection, and I found the message of the poem very interesting. The collection carries the theme of femininity throughout as the poems are all written from female characters’ perspectives. The characters that the personas describe are always females, and no matter they are fictional or non-fictional, they are always the female counterparts of famous male characters. Although each character has her own story and the events embedded in the poems are quite different from one another, there is always a uniformity of the poems since they are all about praising the role of women and reversing the social stereotype on how male has been a common dominance power in the society. The name of the collection, ’The World’s Wife,’ also suggests that male is the gender that usually represents a couple or a group of people in major events as the females are more seen as the appendix to their male partners. This article reminds us that when reading Duffy’s poetry, we should always remind ourselves that the poet intentionally makes up the plot in the poems to carry out her perspective on genders and we should find the message that the poet wants to reveal through the theme of femininity.
Besides the particular use of femininity, Carol Ann Duffy also utilizes the technique on the tone of the persona to make the identity of the voice in the poems more ambiguous. When I read some of the selected poems in the collection, I realized that the personas in the poems differ from one another as some use the third-person perspective while others use the first-person perspective. This is because, in different poems, Duffy tends to approach the messages in a variety of ways so that the different messages could be vividly shown to the audience. Even though all the stories are rearrangements of existed myths or historical events, we should pay close attention to the tone of the personas because some of the poems are writing from a character’s perspective but is actually telling the perspective of Duffy herself as a female poet.
Adding on to the idea of voices of personas, we should also be sensitive to the relation between the poet and the personas. It is intriguing how most of the time, the persona is not writing to present her own idea, but there is still a meaning in the shaping of persona by Duffy. There is sometimes inconsistent vocabulary and perceptions with a character, and when we see this, we should remind ourselves to consider whether the voice has shifted from a character to another. By suggesting ideas from more than one character in one poem, the poet successful adds variety and triggers the readers to read the poems more carefully and be empathetic to different characters in order to better understand the messages.
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