I notice that my second narrative has more description and has more powerful vocabulary compared to my first one. I tried to use a dash in my writing, showing how I had interrupted someone:
Where is your—”
“Didn’t think of anything yet.”
“How about I help—”
“I have an idea. Write about—”
Onomatopoeia was also used in my introduction. I started with the sounds of a clock ticking to show that I was really bored and time had “slowed down” for me. I also used italics to represent that the first sentence is a prologue, and that was something different in my writing. I like my final piece, one of the highlights from my writing is the descriptive language.