Two things that I have done well on my essay includes having established a strong argument on my perspective of the argument. I believe that this is an improvement from last time as I have been able to clearly show my point of view on the argument and have shown reliable evidence and have incorporated counterclaims to improve my argument. Another thing that I have done well in the last essay was showing a general perspective on the argument and have shown who this would have affected.

 

Two things that I could improve on could be having more facts that are relevant to my main 3 points on the topic. Another thing that I could improve on would be focusing on facts that would link back to my topic sentence.