Two things that I did well in is that I wrote in a very formal style I did not use (didn’t, I’m,…) I also provided a concluding statement or section that follows from and supports the argument presented. I felt like I concluded my essay properly and I also highlighted my position and I reflect the heart of the statement and why this topic matters.
Two things that I need to improve on is to Describe the roles of political, civil, and economic organizations in shaping people’s lives. Because I did not really talk about how this shapes people’s lives. Secondly, I need to use knowledge of language and its conventions when writing, speaking, reading, or listening.
I need to expresses my ideas precisely and concisely, recognizing and eliminating wordiness and redundancy. My argumentative essay was too wordy, and was not that clear.