What I think I did well on this essay is my introduction, and I think that I had a good hook and transition for my introduction.  What I might need to improve on is siting the information more specifically, and improve on my closing statement in the conclusion. There are a couple of areas where I marked myself differently for example, some parts I marked myself in between meeting and approaching since I’m not sure where I was. One of the biggest challenges were finding evidence, since I didn’t have any before.